People are leaving houses for water is nowhere,
And People are leaving houses for water is everywhere.
And where water is nowhere one wish if they had a dish of water,
And where water is everywhere one wish if they had a dish.
Everyone wants to quench his thirst,
but Their's thirst will only be quenched if there is water either everywhere or nowhere.
They say it is a natural calamity,they can't help it,
I too feel it is a natural calamity that they are they.
They say we are moving towards globalisation,
but there are many who still don't know how a globe is!!!
Perhaps we have transformed ourselves from white collar workers to blue collar workers,
but who will look after the plight of the ones whose lives are still grey.
It is not that it is only Theirs responsibility to do everything,
but it is the time to stand-up & get counted because there are someone,
who don't need a debate but need either we or They.
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well manish no comments on the writing...
but only one thing to ask "do u want to make a difference? do u want to be the one who will stand against all odds?"
@ santanu
dude....can comment on writting 2....
i didnt get if dis was a compliment or le raha hai meri....
well ur poetic style of depicting the plight of those marooned in the floods of Kosi is really heart touching. But its the time to stand up together not only for helping those stricken by floods but also stop communal violence in orissa and J&K to show to the whole world our root mantra of Unity In Diversity.Infact we can start a donation spree over here for those affected and displaced by floods. Anywayz gud job dude....
kudos(only after u start acting on my suggestive measures)
Nice try at writing :)
the poem does touch a cord or two..n i do believe,u will be playing ur part towards humanity when u can.
mitra...lagta hai ki tum orrisa settle ho gye ho????
Manish..........I am very surprised and happy too that u can write also.these few heart touching truths and meaningful lines show your soft nature towards flood victims that one can't see by looking you at first sight.
as i am not very experienced to give a feedback but i think these lines nicely and also very briefly explain helplessness of victims of natural calamity and your little anger towards administration and their selfish nature also.
Obviously we should help them either by taking administrator as a medium or directly if possible. One can definitely send at least one rupee to them. I think if each two or three family adopts at least one victim’s family then problem can be easily solved up to some extent and that will be like “drowning man catches at straw”. but that will still better for them.
So, I will just say very nice feeling which is also very much important to do something for them.
Keep it up..............
It seems that the Poet within you is still alive and hasn't lost his good old skill of comparing things.
Hope this appeal goes deep down our hearts to the cause of Humanity.
Nice job dude.
Keep the poet alive for the service to the mankind.
well, i'd call this a good start. the prose was better than the poem. it had more flair and flow. the poem seems more of a prose written with intentions of poetry. tighten up the rhyming and the sentence structure a bit and it would be fine. one thing i'm happy about is that you wrote a poem on social issue and not a mushy ballad of faltered love:)
keep posting.
Regarding poem,it was really good.
.. But i suppose if you really got that passion it would be better to spend your oil on action rather than on words....
Such a Plight of the people is really unbearable but here all of us,Indians are used to it .
We are really an old and sick nation
but still we boast of it as being the most ancient civilization..
the most ancient civilization which spreads its hands in front of a nation of mere 400 years of history.
I remember a mystic by the name of Osho who said there is no youth in this country, otherwise how can a youth bear so much of corruption and ignorance and poverty......
ur a poet n we didn't even know it...
but don't be just a poet...
if it was direct from heart...as u told me...
think abt taking ur feelings to a higher level...we r with u ..always
bt if it was just a poem....then..
no comments....
Manish......mujhe garv hai ki tu mera dost hai...really. apne andar ke kavi ko isi tarah nikhartaa reh...it will help u in long run...internally as well as externally.
This poem was extremely brilliant.Do panktiyaan tere liye...
"गर देखना चाहते हो उसकी उङान को,
तो और उँचा कर दो आसमान को ।।"
that was a wonderful poem yaar!
pne
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